Posted by: kendralee on: September 25, 2008
Both essay start with announcing members invited to the conventions. Both state how dearly much we need to fight back for freedom and independance. Also the speeches are about defending our right in war against the enemy. In Patrick Henry’s case he was rebelling against Britain, and Bush is stating that the Al Queda is the enemy.
The difference between the two is Patrick Henry’s speech I think is more formal than Bush’s. Also Henry’s is about the rights we deserve and Bush’s is about maintaining the rights we have.
God Bless America!
September 29, 2008 at 2:01 am
Your rudimentary ideas are intriguing, but they are a bit underdeveloped. The sentence structure is bland and there should be more variation. The progression of ideas is confusing and I suggest you rethink the order; more details in your essay would help with the reader’s understanding. First person pronouns should always be omitted in a formal essay (such as “I” and “we”). There is not an introduction; there is only a plethora of confusing ideas. Some of the sentences are awkward and the grammar is not quite right. You should probably edit your paragraph(s) for grammatical errors, and misused words. Other than the problems you have the paragraphs are decent; they will be much better after you polish them up.